Cheryl walked into the living room to see toys and children’s books scattered about. Jason was sitting in the middle of the mess playing with his toy truck.
“Vrrrrooooom!” he cried, pushing it around.
Cheryl knew he’d never clean up the mess himself and the task would fall to her, as always, but she didn’t mind. Jason was the love of her life. She adored his innocence and child-like wonder. At night, before tucking him into bed, she’d read to him from his large collection of books. He’d sit wide-eyed as she described the adventures of heroes of every kind, human and animal alike. He loved story-time.
She knelt beside him and ruffled his hair.
“Hey slugger, whatcha doin’?” she asked.
“The fire truck is going to put out a fire!” he burst with such enthusiasm.
Cheryl took a seat beside him and started to play. For a moment, her eyes caught the large scar on his head, that traced from his left ear down to his neck. She remembered the doctors telling her that even if he woke from his coma, the trauma to his brain from the car accident would likely cause seriously impaired cognitive function.
She smiled at her 42 year old husband, with his favorite truck. He wasn’t the man she married, but her love for him was as strong as ever.
[This is my entry into the Flash Fiction Challenge for Flash Fiction for the Purposeful Practitioner by Roger Shipp. Write a story based on a photo prompt and introductory sentence in 200 words or less.]
~V
“A very compelling and strong story. The ending is so unexpected yet tender.” she said. “Strangely, my story is about brain injury, too.” She concluded, “I was very touched by this story and Cheryl’s love for Jim.”
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Thank you! 🙂
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Very nice. When I read “love of her life” I had a suspicion what was going on 🙂
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Powerful story! You did well to hide little clues along the way to make the ending unexpected, but in hindsight not a surprise.
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Gut puncher! So sad that her husband turned back into a child, but it’s good that he woke from his coma. Excellent story!
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Thank you.
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Very heartfelt! Great story! 🙂
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Thanks. I appreciate that.
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Wonderful story, I did not expect that ending at all. So good of the wife to put up with and be loving to a husband who has become, mentally a child. He’s very lucky to have her.
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Thank you. I’ve known people that were that loving and selfless and they never get the credit they deserve. I’m glad you liked it.
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Shocking ending — so much love and hope! Fantastic 🙂
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thank you very much. I’m glad the story worked.
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It did {shockingly well!!} 🙂 I look forward to reading more of your Flash Fiction!
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This image seems to have generated a few sad tales, I can imagine how hard life would be in these circumstances.
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Awwweee… I didn’t see that coming until the very end! This is clever, heartfelt, and beautiful! Wow! ❤
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Thank you. 🙂
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Wow – what a punch in the gut. Well written and structured.
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Thank you. I appreciate that.
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Such a nice switch-up at the end! You build up readers and then yank the rug out from under us so well!
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I was wondering during the story what the hook would be. The childhood seemed too perfect (I wish my boys were so good), and then the TBI. It was an effective reveal. I didn’t see it coming.
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Thank you. It’s always nice to hear that the twist works. I appreciate the comment.
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Very, very inspiring! I really love this story.
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Thank you!
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You’re welcome!
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What a love story! Well told!
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Thank you!
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